Character : Jack, his brother, the king and the wicked king, and Jack's parents.
Conflict/resolution : They came out of home/they came home back again.
Country : USA
The time : Future
Age of Jack and his brother : Jack's age is 17, His brother's age is 19
The castle is in one hundred miles far in Jack and his brother lived before.
In that time, some people had superpowers.
Jack and his brother had superpower. The superpower was when they flapped their hand and wait for 5 seconds, fire blaze or laser comes out and kills people or break things.
They broke lots of things because of that superpowers and their parents hit them with a golf club when they used that. They were so angry that his parents whipped so hard and it was to ouch, so they tried to escape the house to not get hit by parents. And they succeed. When they were escaping the house and get far away. They saw a castle. The king thought they was a wicked king's spy and put them into prison. But when they said they were not the wicked king's spy and they had a superpower because the kind king thought he could win the wicked king. The king lost lots of soldiers and land because the wicked king was so strong, but they didn't had superpowers. They are only fluent at fighting. The kind king started to ready the next battle VS. wicked king. Also, they kicked out two commanders and put the two boys into commanders.
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Since you have not finished yet, I will post my comment based on what I have read so far. (I will post another comment after you finish your story) The story is fascinating, but you can elaborate more on the setting. Where was the castle? How did the two main characters feel when they were locked in? What was their reaction in that situation?
ReplyDeleteI have read all the story. The story is well-written. You have effectively shown how the personality of main characters can change because of social influences. You could have improved your story if you had included dialogues in your story, which would have made the story more fascinating.
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